- take the Luke/Ingrid stuff somewhere or make an active decision to cut it out (except don't cut it out though, because your word count can't take that kind of hit)
- if possible, flesh out major relationships
- Luke and Sam
- Marcy and Ingrid
- Ingrid and Sylvia
- Sam and Sylvia
- cut out as much of the rambling parts as possible
- greater period of time between start of Ingrid/Sylvia fight and end
- merge major flashback/monologue chapters so that the main plot is less interrupted
- Ingrid's first and second chapters
- Luke's two chapters (cut out the third because it's pointless)
- Marcy's chapters
- make dialogue snappier and less rambling
- have them spend more time in the cities
- CUT OUT PSYCHOANALYTICAL BITS - don't do all the work for your readers! DON'T BE LIKE KITE RUNNER.
- make sure that problematic characters are consistent
- decide on a car for them to drive
- where should the flashback chapters be? whose should be where?
- NEED A TITLE
may 30 2010 ∞
jun 3 2010 +